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A Change of Orders
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Comment by rone welles on 02/18/12
Still one of the best stories I HAVE EVER READ... Comment by rone welles on 09/11/08 Still a super well written story ... the second time has not changed my opinion ... well done ..... the second chapter should Comment by Tinker on 08/23/07 A submarine is referred to as a Boat. Submariners are insistent on the matter. The senior petty officer aboard a sub is referred to as 'master chief petty officer of the boat' or simply 'Chief of the boa't. If you call it a ship, they WILL be offended. And the gold Dolphins pin is referred to as 'sub-qual'. Also, a nuke officer, has to go thru Navy Nuclear Power School, and it is a pretty big deal, takes a long time, and is considered a rather difficult achievement. (Just so you know.) You have to learn to recognize every valve in the steam plant and the reactor plant manual, describe its location, whether it is normally open or closed, and the same detail on the Rod Control mechanisms. So the likelihood of some one in the shipyard smuggling something in that had no place in a sub, is vanishingly small, as EVERYONE ( ETs, MMs, ICs, and officers) down there is capable of seeing and recognizing what belongs there. They know it like the back of there hands, in the dark, and in stark terror. Comment by stanley morton on 06/24/07 I fell in love with Elaine. Now let her go after the doctor that "programmed" her to be a "WET DREAM" ,Have the doctor "perfecting a "transgender" bomb to deploy over american Servive men, but fails uterly on Elaine and lets her create her Male Self out of spare parts. then turn te doctor into a nurse. Then Elaine, now a woman wanting a man can marry Alaine Comment by RONE on 12/19/05 GREAT STORY ,,,, LOVED THE CONCEPT AND WAY IT WAS WRITTEN ,,, Comment by Jenny on 09/20/05 Just read "A Change of Orders"---loved it. Please consider writing a sequel. There are several unfinished threads that I would love to see brought together. Her relationship with Chris and getting the head of the bad guys that tried to blow up his ship. Please keep writing, you are great at it. Comment by Brooklyn Reader on 05/08/04 This is a great story, with a lot of opportunity for sequels. Elaine is a fabulous character, and I hope some day that you'll bring her back to us in a new adventure! Thanks. Comment by Bob W on 03/16/01 Enjoyed your story. Are you planning a sequel ( Hope Hope )? Comment by Zoe Burgess on 03/14/01 Hey Tigger, |
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