Weird!

   Really cool story. I think it would be cool if Jason became a total girl, and as a girl Steve falls in love with her, but then towards the end Jason becomes a guy again, and they deal with being in a gay relationship.

   The Jade Box ALMOST did that, but then the guys freaked out and refused to talk about their former relationship ever again.

I can't help but notice that your story is incredibly similar to my own story: "A Small Accident," also posted here. Were you, perchance, inspired by mine?

--C.M. Ellis

I basically agree with what Mr. Ram said, but would like to give some suggestions anyway.  I'd like to see some more gradual changes for both changelings such as breasts and hips.  I liked to hear about their difficulty in coping with their new genitilia, e.g. menstration, boners during class, etc. Then maybe the last change would be faces so they became an exact duplicate of the other and end up living the other's life for a while.  There could be the usual high school events from each's new perspective: football game and cheerleading, school dance or prom, etc.  At the end the two changelings would finally have sex with each other after which they would change back.

This story reminded me of a couple of others I've came across in the past. That's ok though, I thought those stories were pretty cool, and this one is too. I like the fact that the subject matter is different from the norm. You seem to be a creative person.

So what else are you gonna come up with Fear's Edge? I'm ready for part two.

Good try. This story does need to be run through a spell checker. There really is no excuse for bad spelling.
I did like the changing points of view, in first person.
I hope the author finishes this story. Asking for help, from readers, for ideas, is unnecessary, this author seems to have a fertile imagination.
Mr. Ram

Good story. THe way that it seem to cover more than one person's transformation I think if this same story would continue that it would work well in THE GREAT SHIFT UNIVERSE. If you want to read Universe Rules and work that way.