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Up Front
by A Happy Wife

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Comment by Silvia   (from Brazil) on 04/19/10
She had decided on B cup breast? OH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do you really said: SHE HAD DECIDED? Are you kidding?
Where in the world a woman decides for a man? Even if he is a sissy, the  woman will never decide for him. NEVER! Believe me!
Silvia.

Comment by Viki on 10/08/09
What an imagination the author has to write such a short, short story, allowing me, the reader, to finish it, any way I want.
Thank you, Wannabe!

Comment by Scottish Mistress on 06/19/09
Lovely! I could almoste feel his embarassment overlying his need.

Comment by Annabelle on 05/29/08
Very cute story; I know a man? just like that.

Comment by WannabeGinger on 11/27/07
Leave the poor girl alone you people!  The story's what matters and I love the picture this wife presents to her audience.... What a lucky husband!  I too would like the hair and beauty aspects covered in more detail - the final revelation of pure femininity!  Keep going Wife!  LOL Ginger

Comment by Karen Marie on 07/26/07
All of your stories are so sweet, I just love them.  Please, please
don't stop writing.  While reading your stories, I find myself
praying to God to let me have a woman like you.

Lots of love and kisses

Karen Marie


Comment by Jezzi Belle Stewart on 01/18/02
I would have liked to see it go on to the hair salon or wig store.  Also it would have been neat to let him pick the makeup look to see whether he was going to be a slut or a nice girl (same with a wig if the hair was included.)

Comment by A supportive reader on 01/06/02
While I enjoy the work of a "Happy Wife", I am distracted by her many spelling and grammatical errors.  In this story, ("Up Front"), which could be quite amusing and enjoyable, she makes many tense changes and seems to have a poor grasp of the third person vernacular as she switches from the third person to the first person pronoun.  Norman Mailer became famous using A Happy Wife's same detached observational, style when he wrote the "Executioner's Song".  But she just doesn't carry it off because of problems with puctuation and point of view.  I think a good editor would add immeasurably to her talent.  On the other hand, the typos are quite indicative of a male, particularly a hyper-testosteronal male.  It makes one wonder if A Happy Wife might not really be male and posing as a female.  This robs to the story of credibility.

Comment by Rebecca Jane on 12/01/01
I thought it moved quite nicely.  I know how I feel with a bra and t-shirt on and people looking at me. The makeup helps because they can't be sure if is a man or woman.  That always gives me a giggle inside.  Once at a stationer's the older woman clerk call me Ma'am and that was nice.  The two teenaged girls behind her giggled.  The young ones always can pick us out sooner because they are always comparing.  Thanks for the story.

Comment by Steve on 11/29/01
alittle drawn out need to spice it up



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