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Lucy's Debut
by Patricia Marie Allen

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Comment by Silvia. on 02/05/10
Yeah! Good job!
I liked.
Silvia.

Comment by Donna on 09/24/01
I love the babysitter theme although I have always thought about the reverse situation of having a female baby sitter fulfil the desires of my young TGs.

Donna

Comment by Paula Eagan on 06/21/01
I enjoyed this story, too.  Only suggestion I would make is that at least half-way through the story, Lucy be referred to as "she" instead of "he".  Pronoun change is one of the surprisingly small things one can do to improve a story like this.  Otherwise, a fine effort.

- Paula

Comment by Paula Jutras on 06/21/01
I love this story. The Halloween part reminds me of the bio of a post op I was once read while surfing sites looking for friends. Really nice story.

Comment by Cissy Gaye on 06/21/01
I have loved this story since I first found it on Patricia's site last year.  I'm so glad she decided to share it with us here.  It's a sweet, sweet story and represents the fulfillment of the kind of wish that so many of us share.  I know Patricia's busy, but I, for one, would love a sequel about Lucy's vacation with the ladies.



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