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I didn't like! Bad story!
Silvia.

as per previous comments

interesting but not to my taste

Way, way too gay for my taste, but I'm going to disagree with the other
folks who commented.  I think it's written quite well.  It must have been, because even though I didn't empathize with the fantasy AT ALL, I finished reading it.  It's just a different
style of prose.  Compare it to free-verse.  Or H.P. Lovecraft.  It's an enthusiastic description of a "scene".
Not everything has to be written in the simple narrative style of
third-grade fiction.  This story is very dark, very hard core, very gay, and very
masochistic.  While I didn't find it hard to read at all, I didn't like it,
but that's just a matter of fetishistic preferences, not literary criticism.

this story needs a lot more work a good begining and explanation of how he got into the position he was in very fast written more work to make it go further

I think the story needs some more work sadly. It is one giant paragraph and it is difficult to read in many ways. some of the description is quite colourful but in the end it was too much hard work to finish reading. sorry