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I Should Have Seen It Coming
by Patricia Marie Allen

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Comment by Silvia.     (from Brazil) on 02/05/10
That's a very sad and bad story! How could a wife, a mother and a sister do this with her husband, son and brother? He is a weak man!
They are evil!
Silvia.

Comment by Diane Sutton on 11/06/01
A fine story with a worthwile storyline. I truly enjoyed reading the story and, had hoped it wouldn't end as quickly as it did. It would be wonderful to have such a wife that would do the things that turned a loving compliant man into Tammy.
The only thing I found that could have been better was the few mistakes in grammar or spelling. There weren't enough of them to make me stop though and, I do so recommend this story to anyone who happens to read these comments. Very well done and I compliment you on your wonderful story.

Comment by tina browning on 01/31/01
 I have read many of your stories here and at FM, and have printed out several to keep among my special favorites.   I love your positive portrayals, and always welcome your keen appreciation of the principles of self-discovery, 'coincidence', and the amazing powers of a smart 'Enabler' be she girl or grown woman.
 This one shows your gifts perfectly, in taking a simple premise of a boy dressed by a sister, jumping ahead to his adult life, and with a kind of charming, step-by-step seduction, showing us how childhood influences can be  so brilliantly tapped into, to bring about a glorious re-awakening of his/her feminine desires.
 And your craftsmanship of understatement as the tale unfolds brings a dimension that adds to one's general delight.

 Thanks so much, Patricia Marie, for sharing this precious gem.

Comment by Paula Jutras on 01/29/01
I was so delighted when I read the bit about it being based on an actual conversation. I truely enjoyed the story and how the transformation seem to go slow enough that he didn't expect what was happening until it was too late.

Comment by emmie dee on 01/29/01
Patricia Marie is one of my favorite writers, and I was delighted that she had a new story poster. I was even more delighted after I read it.



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