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Well, i have to admit that i loved the first one alot, seeing that sometimes things don't always go as you want them to, but i thought that the apologies and the making up went too fast. I thought He had every right to run away and be upset, and while he accepted the terms, being laughed at like that, especially seeing he gets laughed at alot at school (i can relate to that alot) well, i think maybe i would have enjoyed more of a prolonged "getting to know what really happened" story instead of it seemingly to happen in a blink of an eye. Loved the stories tho just this one hit home a bit (more on the school being bullied and picked on, then meeting a girl like that) parts.

This story is worst than the first. (hasty act)
Silvia.

I 100% agree with Jezzi.
If you would have ended the story before the last line on the first story and have him at least somewhat question what was going on while he was being dressed up, the first story would have been fantasic.  "Why do I have to shave my legs?" "Why do I have to wear a nightie to bed?" (Really no reason for that one) "Why does she want me to dress like a girl." If she lied and made up some excuses like "she doesn't like body hair" or something so he went along, that would be fine.  Perfectly believable.  His reaction to being laughed at was realistic and it showed a darker side of what happens when you force someone to crossdress and humiliate them.  It would be unique because there are not that many story like that here.

But what did you do?

He wakes up and immediately wants to apologize to his sister.  What?  He has nothing to be sorry for.  He trusted her and she played him like a fool.  Oh, he "agreed" to the conditions and "he" ruined everything.  Bullshit!  He didn't know anything.  It's like he signed a contract that said at the top "I will go out with you if you do this" without even reading it.  So they go over Monica's and then say grab his arms and force him inside.  That immediately makes me think "Oh, they tricked him again."  But then nothing?  Okay????  Then he says he is sorry (again) and they explain that they were laughing because he was soooo cute and were not trying to be mean.  Because it that context dressing him up like a girl, laughing at him, and calling him cute and saying he looked like a little girl wouldn't be precieved as sarcasm.  Definately.  So Monica tells how she was raped and doesn't trust guys so she dressed him like a girl.  Fine.  But explain that first.  Don't have her relay secret plans through his sister and just laugh as he walks through the door.  And why was a point made only about the last rapist being locked up.  You mean to tell me the 18 year old who raped an 8 year old wasn't caught.  Or that the boys that gang raped her.  I mean really.  She must have said something about it because she went to a psychiatrist.  It's because her neighbor and the local high school boys were never caught but the serial rapist was, right?  Obiviously because she didn't know who they were, espically the "neighbor" seeing as she knew he was her neighbor.  And I'm not going to even try to explain how unrealistic a girl that was raped multiple times (at a very young age too) offering herself as a birthday present, in the nude, to someone she just met is.  All you have to do is read the previous sentence.

Basically you ruined what could have been a great realistic story and turned it into a stupid nonsensical happy ending.  Cheers.

is there a 3 to this story wot happins next  i am sitting here watting for wots next

thank you
harry

I jusrt reread both parts  again after 3 1/2 years, and I stand by my previous comments.  The sequel is sooooo frustrating because it is totally unbelievable:

1) Joe's total 180o turnabout overnight - at least in regard to Monica, Maggie, and Co.? Ask any competant psychiatrist how likely that is given what was done to him and by whom it was done.  I can see him having second thoughts about blaming Carolyn; it would be realistic for him to think the girls had tricked her too - but the dress and laughter of the girls are about as far from friendly as possible and are realistic only if the purpose was to humiliate him (and hurt Carolyn as well).

2)The girls were not out to humiliate him?  Oh, please! - If they wanted him to see them as friends, why were they all dressed as boys/tomboys, 180o opposite of him?  The friendly thing would have been to dress like him.  Why laugh while making their comments?  The friendly thing would have been to hug him - they all had to know he was constantly laughed at at school. The comments they made would have been OK if they had been dressed like him and if they hugged him while making them, but given the way they were dressed and the laughter, how else could they come across to him other than as mean spirited if not down right sadistic?

I do believe Maggie was truthful when she said ...

<<  “When we were laughing ... , well, we were thinking about how much fun WE were going to have!"  >>

... if ‘we’ is taken to refer to just the girls

the aftermath has a happy twist in the tale good story wth great interest i read

Just happened to re-read this story. I must say Jezzi was right in both of her comments and her ending would have been more realistic.

The turn about was just too sudden to be anything that would happen. Joe might actually have commited suicide during the night and I think Carolyn was stupid not to call in some help. And the sequel leaves open what happens to Joe at school - some kids might have seen him running in his girlish finery.

And why would the girls have laughed? As Jezzi pointed out laughter would surely make any boy think that it is only for his humiliation and the reaction would be to run away and maybe end it by suicide. If the girls really found him adorable in coming dressed as a little girl, they would have hugged him and told him how sweet he was.

One point was in my opinion also just too weird and wrong: Monica coming to him naked as a present. This girl had been raped regularly! She would be VERY doubtful of any boy even if she really had used dressing-up her possible boyfriends as girls as a way to find out how "sweet" and sensitive they could be. So would she REALLY have come out naked in their first "date"? If a meeting for an explanation could be called a date. As for Joe, if he had any sense at all, he would have said NO THANKS in that situation and have asked Monica to get dressed. Then they might have had a real relationship.

The writing and concept are really interesting though as we could all ask ourselves what are we willing to do to get love? Lots I quess...

Hugs,
Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)

Ps. in my dreams I would rather be in Joe's place but eventhough I wear diapers and tights for fun almost 24/7 I wouldn't have done what Joe did - not even for those girls I used to dream about when I was Joe's age... (and that is so long ago)

this story combined with the other story was very heart warming and now explained was really good i still feel that joe should have read the list of instuctions first from the off the hasty act combined with this one was well worth reading but you must read one after the other to get the full gist of the story &everything well done a great story combined with the first part hasty act i hope thes comment will be suitable for both stories well written & explained thank you

I seem to like almost all that you write. I just read Hasty Act and Aftermath.  You have truly hit a poignant ending to a Cruel Joke story.
Maybe I'm a sucker for happy endings, but I liked the 2 stories as one unit. I know, I am a slow reader; and I just got to them.  But they are worthwile.  I did have some problems with the explanation for the laughter, but all's well that ends well.  Keep up the good work.   Tardily, Jan

I just re-read this after 2 1/2 years, and I stick by my original comments.  Here's what I think would be a much more realistic ending given how the author wrote the ending scene in part I.

Joe, believing he would be dead meat in school the next day, got up early, packed a knapsack , and ran away from home.  He left a letter for his sister damning her to hell for being a betrayer of his love for her.  Although there was a frantic search, he was never heard from again.

Carolyn sunk deeper and deeper into guilt and depression over the results of what she had really , but stupidly believed would make him happy.  She had bought Monica's story and thought Monica and her friends would all be dressed like she was told to dress Joe.  In hindsight she knew she should have realized what would happen.  She eventually commited suicide.

Monica and her friends had a good laugh.  What a sissy whimp Joe had been ... and his sister had been so gullible!  Monica herself  became sadistic domminatrix

I was amazed when I had finish everything though it is rare thing Some people when they realize and remeber what happen They do make that change that fast! And surprise to see that played in one of your stroies!  Although when the girls told Joe that it was because they were surprise I think they were only saying that to him so He wouldn't run away again!  I feel however you still leave us with a cliffhanger that is left unopen and because of the G rating you are affarid to take us there! I hope I'm wrong  but understand iether way!

I agree with Jezzi. You are a much better author than what is represented here. This story is more of a Hasty Act by you than your usual great writing. Sorry but that is how I see it.
Angel

  I don't mean this to be a flame or cruel; I am just so terribly frustrated at how what I hoped would be a really great story actually shaped up.
  I don't understand how Prue and pervy and Nellie can think that this was a satisfactory sequel.  Joe's 180o change of attitude overnight was completely unbelievable.  And the girl's explanation that their laughter was "happy laughter" doesn't ring true.  Why were they dressed as boys, if not to emphasize the real boy's sissyishness - or at least that's how I think Joe would interpret that.  None of these girls, Carolyn included, are made to appear stupid, and only a completely clueless person would not have been able to predict Joe's reaction to the laughter, particularly Carolyn.  It was made clear that she and Joe shared everything, so she would know how he was treated at school.  Also, the other girls went to school with him, so they would have known, too, at least somewhat.  They thought he could handle what they did?  He's teased at school because he's small, "girlish"; what trust he must have had in his sister to go dressed as a really girlish baby girl, in diapers, yet.  How could they not know he would be right on the edge?
   I like the idea that Joe and Monica get back together, even with him dressing again, but this was totally unbelievable.  On the other hand, I believe that Monica's background does present a believable explanation for her wanting to see him dressed as a girl.
   I really like the concept of this story; if I didn't think you were a good author, I wouldn't have taken the time to write all this.
    Jezzi

when i read the first part i was dismayed at what i thought was a cliff hanger ending with no indication that it would be continued. i came storming in here to demand (lol) a sequel or i'd go nuts, lololol
only to see the aftermath posted phew!! what a relief. it made the story complete and i enjoyed it .but please dont do that again gigglz. at least put a "to be continued " at the end. i can deal with that .huggles from prue

The aftermath makes sense of the first part, and together
they make a good story.  Anne has been giving us one good tale
after another, most of them thought provoking in one way or
another.

Pervy

The start of the happy ending for Hasty Act. Another well thought out story from Ann. Although it wasn't there the explaination of Joe's feelings and then  Monica's background makes the story more understandable. Thank you Ann.