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The Conscripted Bridesmaid
by Alyssa Davis

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Comment by Silvia. (from Brazil) on 04/29/11

Hi Alyssa.
This story isn't good.
Why does Shirley wanted blackmail Alan if she likes him?
I think, if she had talked to him, certainly and willingly he would do what she wanted, without blackmail need.
She was unfair and evil,with the brother who loves her to much.
He didn't deserved what she did with him.
Sorry Alyssa, but this is what I think!
Kisses.
Silvia.

Comment by Barbara on 12/05/07

Good story, well constructed. Has many sounds of truth and honesty about it.
A quibble: the parents' reaction to Alana is almost too easy and the non-appearing father's response is taken for granted. A bit too much, but then anything else would detract from the story and lead it in unnecessary directions. All in all, an enjoyable read.

Comment by Barbara on 12/05/07

Good story, well constructed. Has many sounds of truth and honesty about it.
A quibble: the parents' reaction to Alana is almost too easy and the non-appearing father's response is taken for granted. A bit toomuch, butt hen anything else would detract fromt he story and lead it unnecessary directions.

Comment by Kristi Fitzpatrick on 07/27/03

Fun story Alyssa. Thank you so much for a real kind group especially sis. It was a quick read but rewarding. Hugs Kristi

Comment by Fredrikka Joy on 04/26/02

This was a well written story. And well edited too, compared to some I've seen. Well done.

Comment by Jane Hudson on 03/03/02

Love your story fab I totaly enjoyed it my dear.Another great story of sister and brother living and helping him being feminmine .

Comment by Carolyn Baxter on 02/08/02

Thank you Alyssa. You really are sensitive to a story line that is thrilling to read but only wished for.

Comment by Diane Sutton on 11/22/01

Here again is a showcase of the talents of this author. Another top notch story where Alyssa shows us her more than ample writing skills. A story that will likely give many readers a reason for looking at her other wonderful tales.

Comment by Caitlin Rose on 08/16/01

Very well done. I like stories like this, where the transformation is an act of joy, rather than an act of compulsion. The external self is allowed to come into alignment with the internal. Isn't it something that most of us wish for?

Alyssa, you did a great job

Comment by "Princess Pervette" on 08/15/01

Terrific story. As you suggested, it's hard to come up with an
original approach to the male-bridesmaid theme. But you did it.
For once a boy who had the good sense to recognize the opportunity
life had handed him & enjoy it, instead of panicking as so many
do in these stories. This one's a keeper; congratulations!

Pervy

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