when he first shot his mouth off about a divorce, he should have kept his speedboat  mouth shut & just did it!!! how dumb did he think she was?? she's a lawyer for chirst sake!!!!

I think, he'll run away, and kill his cheating wife.
Disgusting.

good one to fantasize on

another waste of typeface and cruel besides, will take a long while to get this nightmare out of my mind..i may be alone but i hate this kind of trash..just reafirms belief that lawyers are all scum, male or female

great story and it follows a recurring theme, but one of these days
someone will add thye victims revenge,
. why don't you do it.

a few missing letters from the story at different parts it as also run together without any breaks for this but a rsonable story that needs more padding out

an interesting story quite a shock to know what he had let himself in for  could have been longer and a bit more padding out

I agree with the other comments, it was a little rushed but I still liked it.  I especially agree with Stefani V that we need to find out what happened with Mr. Gomez in Mexico.

Ok, some things could have taken a little longer but, the truth is I think this is a very nice story and think your plot line was well conceived.

I would come back for sure and read another one if you decide to take the pen in hand again and write one for us.

I've read quite a few story and this is closer to the top than anywhere near the bottom of the list. So, I see no reason why you should not write again.

Thank you for posting a story here.

Diane

I enjoyed your storyline a lot.  I also think you should have continued the story a little longer.  I would have liked to see just how much Gomez liked crossdressers.  Nice touch taking him to leather bar that looked liked a warehouse.  No where to run and no where to hide...  All those "men in black" and him in 'pink', how tittilating.  Don't stop, send us more.  Thanks.



Stefani V.

Good effort!  I have to agree with Nellie though about the story being rushed.  Its a good storyline but you should take some more time to develop it further.  The beginning is good with Barbie looking back but you also need to tie the ending back to the beginning.  A final paragraph describing where Barbie is now would have helped.

I haven't decided about this story yet. The writing isn't too bad but needs some work. The writer almost seemed in a hurry to get through it by the way the words seem.

The story line makes me sad. Granted it is fiction and someone's fantasy, but that the woman thought nothing of turning the man into someone's possession. Whether it is as a kept person or a sex slave, it still doesn't seem quite right.

enjoyed your first little story attempt here. Made it seem like John was sold as Barbie to a white slaver or something.