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I think Kyle will kill Barbara for what she did to him.
He will hate her forever.

x4Wm4N I really liked your post.Really thank you! Cool.

b9TWwg I value the article.Much thanks again. Want more.

Now that I'm not working full time and have more time on my hands, I finally got around to reading this classic TG story.  And a true classic it is.  This reminded me in certain respects of Shakespeare's Twelfth Night with all the misidentifications, miscommunications and misunderstandings.  

I'm not a big fan of farces and some of the farcical elements of this story were not funny to me.  For example, I didn't understand why a restaurant that served Asian Indian food would have a Western Indian theme.  However, I did enjoy many of the other humorous elements, such as the put down of the Jerry Springer like talk shows.  I also didn't understand why Dawn used Macy's real name (although sometimes she called it Sears) and not Bloomingdale's (calling it Floweringvale's).

Overall, I found the story very enjoyable, although I would have enjoyed it more if there was more detailed descriptions of the heavy petting and sex scenes.

As far as Demi's future, it is clear to me, no matter what the crystal ball or coffee beans say, that Demi goes through with SRS.  She is already overloaded with hormones, is contemplating having her penis and testicles, which are already atrophied from the 'roids, sewn up inside her body and has almost everyone rooting for her to go all the way, not least of all Jo.  Hey, if everyday someone played with my sensitive breasts, got me off with a vibrating dildoe and made me wish out loud for a vagina before I was allowed to cum, I'd certainly be signing up for the operation with 3 months.

However, my suspicion is that Jo finds someone else to love at the Amazonia school, since many of the real girls there have what she was looking for in Demi, a sexy, curvy, athletic girl's body with an adventurous dare-devil mind.  Jo and Demi certainly part ways when they go off to college.  

I like to think that Demi follows Aunt Elvira's dream and enrolls in an Eastern Elite girl's college like Smith and ends up after college in New York City.  At this moment (September, 2013) she is already working for the Hillary in 2016 committee, making her mother proud.  I also think that she ends up with a guy being a DINK in Manhattan.  Even when she was still Kyle, she was willing to experience sex with Steve and kiss and more with Derek.  After all, a guy can caress sensitive breasts too, plus he has the natural equipment to fill up and satisfy Demi's new vagina.

Thanks to Dawn for writing and posting this wonderful story.

SS

   I loved the story  , I was very "involved"  with the characters . I hope  you write  more , I hope  you finish this story  and write  47 more simulare stories. I was very impressed  indeed .......Thank you  so much !!!!   I hope you become famous and  filthy rich !!!!!

This is the best story I have ever read online.  It was simply amazing.  Did you ever write anymore to this story?  

I can't wait until the movie comes out!

You have written a truly entertaining novel. I wish I knew more about Demi, but your ending told me just enough to draw me into reading more of your work.  Had you told anymore about Demi, and I think the ending would have been anticlimactic.  Thank you.

-Amy

I know this was written some time ago, but I hope you get a warm glow from knowing you wrote such a classic.

I congratulate you on keeping the reader on tenterhooks for an epic 17 installments, a true novel that tantalised you through one quixotic episode after another. What talent you have.  A huge imagination.  I loved reading the thoughts and machinations of so many great characters.  

Could this be made into a film or better still a theatre farce?  

There is definitely something of the farcical in the story line, but a great farce that manipulates Kyle into becoming Demi without ever really knowing if he/she is doing it willingly.

And what becomes of Kyle/Demi and others in the story?  Well, the crystal ball told us a lot but not too much!!  A perfect ending that left us wanting more.

Thank you Dawn, you are indeed blessed with a talent!  

Love TinaC x

I got to part 10, and I cannot finish reading this story. It is the most absurd gay/CD/TG, backstabbing, plot laden story I have ever read. No way, even in fiction, could this be close to real. I have lived my entire life as a woman, even if others tried to stop me. I protected myself with a vengeance, and after all these years, I am still me. Your protagonist hasn't caught on yet that his clothes are femininely cut, and actually do scream girl.

The conspiracies you have detailed in this story, are so improbable, that no self respecting boy, who considers himself a boy, would have let this get this far.

This story is unreal, improbable, implausable, and very, very unrealistic.

I loved this story!! i hope u add more 2 it. i would love c what happens 2 demi.

This was a wonderful story.I would love to know where it ends also.The violent parts are a bit scary but I would have loved for most of the events to have happened to me in real life.

Far too many TV/TS stories are rushed, sordid affairs that leave the reader struggling to keep up, as the central character is forced through a series of implausible events.

Here we have a story that isn't formulaic, and is a genuine delight to read. I could hardly put it down! The quality of English language is very good, and (most of) the characters are highly believeable. There's a few typos and one or two small factual errors... but nothing that couldn't be tidied up, to leave you with a really A1 grade work of fiction. With small changes, worth publishing, I'd say.

More, please!

a brilliant story of change and excitement it has taken a few hours to read through but a brilliant story

a good start to this story look foreward to reading the next part

I've just discovered this story, and, though I'm only up to Part 5, I find that the farcical misunderstandings and mistaken identities are developing to hilarious levels. I can't wait to find out what happens next! I'm writing this comment now, rather than waiting until I finish the whole story, because I was afraid that by then I'd forget a point that occurred to me that I wanted to comment on: Usually in a story involving a cross-dressing male, when the guy first sees himself in makeup, he finds his appearance to be beautifully feminine (in fact he's often more attractive than the female characters around him). It's refreshingly realistic (even though realism is usually not considered characteristic of a farce, a realistic setting is essential to offset the wacky behavior of the characters) to find a story like this one where he still looks like a boy in makeup (or, as Virginia thinks, a very masculine-looking girl).

I just finished the story!  I Found the story veryinteresting and so wishing to know how it truely ened I understand the way you did though and Thought of it to be a wonderful ending!  Though I do have to say that I hated the way you stero type people to do any fortune telling that there automatically in an occult!  I feel you should have done your home work on that But other wise you did a very good job in telling this story I just wished that it could have gone on a bit longer then what it did!

You made the same mistake as Christopher Columbus did some 500 odd years ago. You are completely confued about India and native American "Indians". Indian restaurant and Indian dishes you referred to belong to India, the South Asian country. It has nothing to do with native Americans living in Iowa. Columbus intended to find India. He ended up in North America and mistakenly named the native Americans "Indians". We should know better now.

And the tennis player is Venus Williams, not Vanessa.

a great start to what looks like is going to be a great story ihave read 2 parts today and will comment on the rest after i have finished reading

Author, Author,  Bravo.
A truly wonderful story. Shapespeare eat your heart out.
A Comedy of Errors, Much a do about Everything! and All's Well
that Ends Well.

Dear Ms. Dawn,

this is a wonderful story. Barb is fantastic. She is such a sweet manipulator. She loves her child as she humiliates him. She worries about her child as she destroys any posibility of his living as a man. This is the sweetest psychological castration I have ever read. I have never enjoyed stories with angry dominating charecters in them. Barbs loving domination as she forces her child to live as she wants is priceless. Domination always includes abuse, and this mother's abuse of her child is so refreshing. It would have been nice if the mother could have arranged to have her child gang raped, but maybe that would change the loving tone of the story a little too much.

I so look forward to reading more of your gentle stories. Thank you for this one.

Tammy Girl

Dawn's story is on the same level as the Shakespearean comedies, where people dress up as the opposite sex in order to fool someone or find something out or catch each other, and you get boys playing girls dressed up as boys, and it gets so confusing and funny... So many wheels within wheels, sub-plots, and different things all going on at once.  It is Real Life in microcosom, and at ten times the intensity.  Real fun stuff.  Bless, you, Dawn, for such an entertainment !

This is the best farce I have read in a very long time. I have worked my way through all the Tom Sharpe novels and have been lost for some years needing another sublimely ridiculous plot. This beats 'Porterhouse Blue', 'Wilt' and very nearly 'Blot on the Landscape'.  In all honesty this could be turned into the screenplay for an outrageously funny film. You have a delicious sense of humour that had me guffawing and spluttering all over my computer screen. Simply brilliant. What's next?

Dawn                                                                      I've just finished your absolutely wonderful story of Demi/Kyle. I consider myself a male lesbian (although I haven't been able to transform :-( and so I could relate exactly what kind of emotions were coursing through Demi's mind.  I wish I could experience her emotions as the female hormones began to course through her veins.  I am sure that after living for such a long time in Demi's world that Kyle would soon be a forgotten memory.  Your story was a pleasure to read because of its syntax and readability.  I will never forget it!                                                                                           Love                                                                  Dana

Great Story :-)
One of my favorites and I've read a lot.
The ending was good too, keeps everyone wondering, and open for a sequel.

The best part was how everyone tried to manipulate everyone and how it backfired on most of them.  

Can't wait for the next story.

Finished at last!  Not sure if I'm happy or not.  On the one hand my curiosity is satisfied, whilst on the other I can no longer enjoy the delicious suspense of wondering where your suspiciously devious mind is going to push the protagonists next. As I've said before, a laugh a minute and an intriguing conclusion.  Hmmm, or did you simply decide to end it without a conclusion. We poor innocent readers will never know.

Thanks a lot, Dawn, I hope you rectify the unemployment position soon.  As on of my few visits to your country I used Newark Airport, perhaps I passed by your home. Who knows?

congratulations

Geoff

I'm only halfway through but I can already say this is one of my favorite TG tales. I really like the way Kyle/Demi is getting him/herself into ever more difficult situations by trying to have his cake and eat it too. Another plus is the humorous style, I often laughed out loud. Good stuff!

What a wonderful story.  I waited hourly for each new episode to come out.  Waiting with trepidation to read what new thing happened to Demi this day...  

What a horrible disappointment the ending was after 17 installments of ramping up the ante towards the eventual but nebulous sex change.

*sigh*
 Dayna.

Dawn

Thanks for a truly wonderful story, and a great ending.   Madam Zeta and her crystal ball were quite right not to tell you what happened to Demi.  It's time she had a bit of peace in her life.  I'm quite sure she has settled down and stopped getting herself into the kind of scrapes she used to. ;-)

Thanks again for the great tale and you take a good long rest now, unless you happen to pick up a hitchiker.

Love

Karen

A great, funny, but still unfinished story.  Isn't anyone else frustrated?

  Wonderful tale.....I can't wait for the next one you do...

Well,..........
 I purposely avoided commenting on this story until it was completed.  I must admit that the first chapter hooked me and I HAD to stay with it til the end.  I wasn't disappointed.  You did a MARVELOUS job of writing here and you deserve all the rave reviews that have been coming your way during your telling of this tale.  I'd like to add my congrats to all the others and say, without reservation, that your writing style is very reminiscent of another DeWinter and yet, fresh and exciting.  This was a very well thought out, well written, read and I thank you for it.  Keep it up, Dawn.  You obviously, IMHO, have a BRIGHT future as an author and I will be there, reading, every step of the way!  VERY very well done.
                                       Cathy_t_ said that  

I have to say not many stories kept me riveted and waiting for the next instllment, but this one did it.  It kept  me on my toes and it made me laugh at Kyle's 'sure-fire' schemes.  It also drove me crazy whenever an installment was finished, and there was nothing more to read.  I just have to say that this story about a teenager willing to do anything to be cool was, at first, not my cup of tea but as I read on I was slowly but surely mesmerized by Dawn's weaving of one great tale.  

Part 18 is the end of Anything for a Moped, which I always intended to be novel-length (rather than an open-ended serial).  I'd like to thank everyone who encouraged me to keep writing.  It's always important to give friendly feedback, but especially when the author is, like me, a newcomer to fiction-writing. The purpose of the story was to bring a smile to your face.  If it did that, it succeeded.

I'm really enjoying the story, but really, it's going on forever!  I almost can't read it anymore!

   Hey....I really can't wait until part 20!

I really enjoy the saga, because it entertains me and makes me laugh, all good wishes for future episodes of your confused adolescent.

Dawn,

    I really love this story.  It's one of my favorites.  I can't wait to read the next installment.

Yes!  I'm enjoying reading your story so much I'm neglecting to write more on my own series.  Good news/bad news, I guess.  But thanks, and thanks again.

Um, does anyone else think it's about time for someone to "slap" Kyle until she comes to a few realizations about herself?  Not that she needs a beating, I was thinking more of a verbal wake-up call.  A shuddering personal epiphany.  Or maybe a series of small ones.  It's often a wrench to your own assumptions when you confront truth about yourself.  She's been hiding for a while now.

Keep it up, I'm enjoying the progress of this ugly duckling.  And the gangster Finns are a real hoot, too.

Possibly one of the best stories on this archive and after a difficult start getting better all the time.

I didn't really like the first few parts. It felt constructed, as if the author tried to tweak her characters in any way she could to force them to act her way. This didn't make them sympathic and left the feeling the author congratulated herself too often on her own cleverness.

But I'm really happy I kept reading because the later chapters are much better. Now that the foundations are laid the story can progress on its own. The hilarity of the situation can shine through. Reading the chapters 10-13 I couldn't help giggling all couple minutes. Lots of fun.

This story has been the best I have ever read!  I look every day for the next part.  

Keep up the Great Work,

Carla

I love this story SO much and am glad that everything worked out for Demi. I wish that Demi could still be a member of the black shirts and not the jets. I think that Demi and Derek would make a cute couple. I can't wait for #14!!!

Love, Britney

great story...just waiting on part 13, cant wait to see what happens next

cant whitefor #13

 I have really enjoyed your reading this story and hope that you are able to post more soon

I think I enjoy this story so much because everything is so unexpected.  It's an adventure unlike any story I've read.  I want to applaud your effort and thank you for making this a story worth reading.  And thanks for making me laugh alot too.
Please don't make us wait to long for the next chapter.

What a wild ride!  I can't think of when I've had more fun reading a story.  Please continue.  I can't wait to see what the future has in store for your young hero, Kyle.

I started out with high hopes of this series. The first episodes were original and fresh - it was getting away from all of the old cliches. I was expecting it to be about an ordinary boy who was forced to dress as a girl, but would then return to his normal life, perhaps having learned a thing or two about himself and the opposite sex. Instead, it has reverted to the same old cliches - about how a boy is either conditioned to become a girl; or really but unknowingly wanted to become a girl all the time. What a coincidence that these things just happened to him. Cliche-ridden and boring after a bright start. And the dipsy mother is supposed to be endearing but in fact is just irritating.

This is the best I ever read

Dawn

How do you manage to get so deeply into the mind of a teenager like that?  I don't know if everyone goes through that stage of being totaly self-centred, completly foolhardy and with that special quick-wittedness that makes you tell the exact story that will cause you the most trouble, and also with that stubborness that prevents you from ever going back on what you said, despite the fact that it's only going to get worse.  That time before you learn the meaning of the phrase, 'if you're in a hole, stop digging!'  Kyle's attitude brings back a few cringe making memories to me anyway.

More congratulations for a superb story,

Love

Karen

ps The quiz was easy!

Dawn, you have an evil, coniving mind.  You must be either a car salesman or an estate agent in real life.  I intend to bear that in mind should I ever have any dealings with you.  However, in this case it's providing a story of breathtaking complexity, with so many twists, I not absolutely convinced even your devious brain is really keeping up with it.

The giggle factor is high, and I'm looking forward to the ultimate conclusion.   I think I can guess what it'll be, but I'm sure you're going to make a fool of me!

Geoff

This is undoubtedly one of the best that I have ever read! You deserve the Pulitzer!  Looking forward to the next installment!!!

Please take him/her all the way.A great story

Dawn - Excellent story. I love the way you define your characters and expound on their thoughts. Please, keep up the writing. I can't wait to read more of Kyle's evolution.

Best Wishes,
Jacki

An excellent story so far! I hope you do get everyone together and explain the boy's position, the deal and get everything cleared up. The conditions imposed on the poor lad make it seem like he is being punished--I do hope that isn't the case! I, personally, would like to see him wind up with Joannie!  

one of the better stories i've read in a while.
thank you for writing such a good story.i like the humor and the situations kyle finds himself in.i hope he and joannie get together in the end.

         thank you.

hurry! next chapter

Hello, Ilove your story very much. There is just one thing wrong with it though. You reminisce too much. You go on and on and I got bored many times. You devote too many paragraphs to nothing. It is ok for a few, but when you devote 6 or more paragraphs to talk about nothing then there is a problem. You probably want to stretch out your story. I know you want to let us know what is going on in their minds but this is rediculous.
I hope the next story improves. Describing the clothes he has to wear is better than reminisceing all the time.

  I really do feel sorry for that poor guy.

regarding chapter 8 --- wow.

Thank you!
Elizabeth

A wonderful story!

Please please please let us have the next instalment of Moped. This must be my favorite story of all time. Why - because you have kept it credible, things are moving along at a realistically slow pace and there is great suspense. It's also very well written.

Keep up the good work, and it would be great if you could maintain that realism, rather than rushing Kyle into womanhood. It is so much better that he is a boy who finds himself reluctantly trapped in this position, especially at school. Please let us savour each development to the full.

How about some side-fastening slacks, or plucked eyebrows, or... but who am I to make suggestions to this master (mistress?) storyteller?

Thanks again.

i hope you will have nest chapter soon great store

   Cool.Fave comment was where Elvira corrected her son by saying she was born AFTER the Kennedy assasination.

   I think this should climax by Kyle/Demi getting all the people invloved in this story together and tell them what HE wants.

Who's the best?  Dawn's the best!  Ra!  Ra!  Ra!  I love this story!  Keep going Dawn!  You're the Queen!

Kitty

Dawn,

 Great story!  Please take Demi all the way!

thanks for the great work!!!,
Elizabeth

   This is so cool.

   Maybe Kyle can become like a total hermophradite-like Strong Kyle when Jo wants it,then Demi at other times,and the line is totally blurred.He becomes masculine and femine at the same time.

   Great story...

   I know that Barb is going to discover the breastforms and get Kyle onto hormones...but is there anyway you could NOT do that?I think it would be cooler if Kyle just did crossdressing instead of really turning into a girl.

  Can't wait for Kyle and Steven's "date".

I love this story and I am looking  forward to the next chapter.

This story is getting better and better.  Love the humour too.  Keep up the good work.

Karen

This story is great!  I love it!  Keep up the good work.  I can't wait to read the next chapter.  I love how he tries to hide his growing femininity at school.  I hope you keep his panties just peeking through those girly clothes in class for a while.

Thank you,

Kitty

Dawn,

I hope you're enjoying all the nice comments you're getting beceause you've earned them!  This is a wonderfully creative story with two (maybe three) well-realized personalities at its center.  I love the way both Kyle and his mom have begun to feel ambivalent about what's going on after their initial take-no-prisoners stances at the outset.  

I also really empathize with Kyle as he is being excluded from one group, only to be adopted by another set of kids he had only disdained in the past.

But adding Joannie to the mix is just wonderful. She twists the plot in wonderfully new ways and I can only wait with baited breath to see if she and Kyle manage to fully feminize each other.   Or is she too clever for that and will only Kyle end up really femme.  

However it turns out, you'r doing a great job with this nifty story. Brava!

Fantastic story. Full of suspense and all the more exciting because Kyle comes across as an average guy who would never normally consider wearing girl's clothes, yet is forced into it by circumstances which are much more plausible than those in most stories. The mixed image theme is rare, but absolutely my favourite type of story, and this is the best I've read in ages. I implore you to keep up the good work and get Ch.5 out as soon as you can!

please hurry and finish the next chapter.  i can hardly wait.

XOXO

misty

Let me lead off by saying that I'm liking this story a whole lot.  I tend to really enjoy originality, even if it's only very subtle.  This story seems to be making an effort to be 'different' but not at the cost of the story.  The pacing is perfect, not trying to rush too much and providing lots of detail.  I love Kyles mom.  She obviously loves her son and wants to help him out, but she just as obviously enjoys having him wear girls clothes.  I find this so much better than the stereo-typed "Punishment" mom or the "I don't know why it never occured to me before but why don't you wear your sisters clothes" mom.  What makes me really excited about this story is the competition between Kyle and Joanie.  The idea of a boy and a tomboy getting into a "I'll wear whatever you want as long as you wear it first" competition has tons of potential and Dawn sets it up believably.  Can't wait to see where that goes.  

Now, my attempt at some constructive criticism... The security guard in part 2 was not very believable.  I can't imagine a security guard, asked by a concerned mother to go look in the bathroom for her 14 year old, reacting like he did just because the kid was hiding in the bathroom stall. Given the effort that Dawn has gone to making the rest of the story believable and logical, the security guard was a jarring omission.  After reading the guards reaction, I reread the preceeding section to see if I'd missed something and that's not a good sign.  If this story gets rewritten, might I suggest the guard overhears something between Kyle and 'the creep' to make the guards actions make more sense?

Anyway, great job Dawn!  Keep the quality coming!

i love this story.  i like ones that tease with the boy trying to be a boy but wearing girl things

Thankyou for the wonderful story, look forward to more chapters as you write them. Pat

A good story so far with a couple of twists thrown in. Part 4 adds to the plot. And what made Joannie's gran faint? Hopefully we will find out soon.

Thank you.  Wery good story.

Excellent premise.  Better written than one might expect.  Part One had us sitting on the edge of our seats.  Part Two meandered a bit, but Part three seems to have regained some momentum.  Looks like it could be a great story if all falls into place.

Outstanding story -- methodic, progressive -- slowly making the changes.  Can't wait for more -- thank you!  Elizabeth

excellent work on part 3 with the boys feelings toward the bra and being found out.

 Brilliant,I say.  Brilliant, hilarious -- and provocative.  Can't wait for more.  The 'Gay/Trans/TV/pervert' exchanges in the store and restaurant are a scream...and the overreactions, stereotypes, and misunderstandings seem close to the idiotic presumptions we run into in 'real life'  !!

 Thanks...eager for more of Kyle and what will have to be his most unusual progress toward feminine self-discovery.

Just love the story line, and can't wait for the next installment.
How far can you go buying unisex clothes and when do you cross the line?

I tend to only review those stories I like.  And I like this one a whole lot.   Kyle and his mother are the major protagonists in this tale of strong wills.  Kyle over states his case that most feminists are lesbians who want women to look as much like men as possible.   His mother, a feminist, challenges this belief with a deal that could win Kyle the moped he'd been wanting.   All he had to do was dress in female clothes that he picked out for a month; well that is except for added bra his mother insists he wear under what ever else he picks.

In Part II,  Kyle and his mother go shopping to solidify the contact.  Kyle has taken the bate, or so it seems.  As he lays on the floor in front of her watching TV, she cautions him about certain moves that could expose his bra straps to a close observer.  And lest those amble cut jeans slip down and show his panty line, well better not do too much running for the month..

As he is doing his homework in front of the TV, his mother notices that from time to time he fidgets with he bra straps under his black unisex T-shirt.  She cautions him that if he isn't careful, someone might detect what he is wearing under his otherwise unisex collection.   Might not want to do too much throwing or running either she adds.

So what will happen when Kyle heads off to school wearing a sports bra under his new wardrobe?  Will he be detected or will he pull it off and become the proud owner of a moped and the envy of his friends?  Will he start wearing clear nail polish or lipgloss as the month progresses?  I can hardly wait to find out.

Extremely well written with lots of perspective from both mother and son's perspective.